Tuesday, August 04, 2009

Sad Refrain




The pearl of her lipgloss against a perfect tan. She has a well turned heel. Impossible wasp waist. Outside her husband walks back and forth behind the lawnmower, laying down strips of sleek green.
He longs, as he treads miles and goes nowhere, for endless lawns. The right balance of sun and water. A glass of gin to take away the dry thirst. He looks up, sees her at the window, and lifts his hand to wave.
Every time he kisses her the colour sticks to his mouth. It tastes sweet. He licks his lips. Shadows stretch across the grass.

13 comments:

neve black said...

Oh, my God, has anyone ever told you how absolutely gorgeous your words are? Yes, you say that's been touched on a few times already?

Damn. Nikki. Repeat what I said a gazillion times and then add it to every post here. Um, Missy Pants, where's your chapbook?

Nikki Magennis said...

Hehe, thanks for that, Neve, I kind of needed it today!

Funny, I've just been thinking of making some kind of collection of flashes. Chapbooks would be great. But I'd like to handmake each one, of course, with illustrations ...

anyway, thanks again. xxx

Danielle said...

sorry,,i cant post a coment..i m to buy to pick up the npieces of my heart which just broke while reading your latest post..sigh*

Craig Sorensen said...

Ahh. Lovely.

That's music to my eyes.

You should make those chapbooks. It would be great to see you combine your ability with words to your sense for visual arts.

Nikki Magennis said...

Oh, sorry Danielle! and thanks, too.

I'm working on it, Craig! It's a shame it seems so boringly complicated, what with gutters and barcodes and all that crap. I suppose this is why we have publishers ...

Craig Sorensen said...

I agree it is complicated, but that is to its credit. It's anything but boring. It's layered, begs re-reading You pack a lot of depth in very short span.

If the vision doesn't feel quite right, I'm sure you'll be able to work it out; no need for another set of eyes.

Nikki Magennis said...

Oh, ha! I was talking about making a print-on-demand chapbooky thing!

As for the short .. well, yes that does still need work. Funnily enough, I was almost aiming for boring with these stories, well, not so much boring, but repetitious, like a Philip Glass piano piece, using the whole idea of variations on a refrain, cycles within a larger cycle, something.

Ahem. It all seemed to make sense at the time!

Craig Sorensen said...

Duh!

I was trying to figure out what you meant by barcodes, and certainly boring didn't describe what you had written.

That's what I get for blogging when I'm in the middle of editing my work.

What a dork! (Me, that is, you made perfect sense.)

Sorry. Sheesh.

Nikki Magennis said...

Pas de tout, Craig. I know I've made no sense for about the past six months! ; )

Craig Sorensen said...

Oh, and I got the repetition. Very well rendered in the act of mowing, and in the perfect tan and lip gloss which, for me, implied meticulous maintenance of them.

Nikki Magennis said...

Yay! Yay yay! It's so cool to know someone got that bit! yes, this was all about the quotidienne and the daily cycles of life. And a nod to Edgar Allan Poe, hence the title. And the crows. Shadow of death, etc. I'm so pleased the piece got such an excellent reader, Craig, thanks!

Danielle said...

of course i meant busy not buy..looksallpuzzled*

neve black said...

Response to your visual imagery in motion: Where do I buy a copy?

Gorgeous!!!